Nowadays, I think the biggest pressure on children is education. You know, education is to determine our future. But of course, too much of anything is not good. a lot of dads. Mothers today still believe, learn as much as possible, play is just a waste of time. So they make their children study day and night. And then they force their children to study before the program or hire a tutor to come home. to teach. and their children will be stressed, and you know what will happen? those children will be autistic or at least depressed. Youth needs to balance both the energy of learning and playing, so studying too much is not good and playing too much is not good, let's live a life Teenagers are full of fun!!! Good luck and have a nice day!!

dịch:ngày nay,tôi nghĩ áp lực lớn nhất đối với trẻ em là việc học hành.bạn biết đấy,học hành là để quyết định tương lai của chúng ta.nhưng đương nhiên,cái gì nhiều quá cũng sẽ không tốt.rất nhiều bố mẹ hiện nay vẫn tin rằng,học càng nhiều càng tốt,chơi chỉ phí thời gian.vậy nên họ bắt con cái của họ học ngày học đêm.và rồi họ thúc ép con họ học trước chương trình hoặc thuê cả gia sư về nhà để dạy.và con cái họ sẽ căng thẳng,và bạn biết điều gì sẽ xảy ra không?
những đứa trẻ đó sẽ bị tự kỷ hay ít nhất là bị trầm cảm.tuổi trẻ thì cần cân bằng cả năng lượng học và chơi,vậy nên học nhiều quá cũng không tốt mà chơi nhiều quá cũng không tốt,chúng ta hãy sống một tuổi thiếu niên tràn đầy niềm vui nhé các bạn!!!
           chúc may mắn và có một ngày vui vẻ!!  

Children are under a lot of pressure these days, but adults take it for granted. The most noticeable pressure is probably the pressure from studying. Children in modern society actually have a lot more pressure than their parents when they were young. Grades are not the only standard you have to pay attention to because good grades are not enough to guarantee a bright future, or your place in the school environment. Besides, being a child in modern times also means having an extra circle of friends online. Messages with friends can bring laughter, a comment on a personal page can bring a happy smile, but conversely, the number of hearts is dropped for each post on a personal page. can also be a source of stress. There is another source of pressure, which can be easily controlled but unfortunately, is the least recognized and most difficult to acknowledge, which is the pressure that parents create for their children. The most typical example of putting pressure on children can be mentioned the comparison sentence "other people's children". So, instead of imposing, we can learn to listen to the children, it will help us to better understand the wishes and abilities of the children.

Child abuse is a very serious offense that can last up to five years in prison. Children can be hurt by even a single criticism from their parents. Consequences not only hurt the child's soul but can lead to their serious life. The vulgar curses from the parents for the children are a needle in the heart of the uninjured child. Some even locked themselves in their rooms and locked the door. Violence, mostly caused by people without a conscience, barbaricly lost all morality of a human being, and what is worth mentioning, more pitiful; the perpetrators of such violence are also the parents of the children, the parents who have mercilessly tortured their children physically and mentally, it is a shame for the fathers who do this. mom. There are many reasons given by these people to the police for their barbaric behavior. In it is also a reason to deny the behavior, deny his responsibility.

_{This is my opinion :D}

        Today, children are increasingly under pressure from families and schools and I would like to mention school pressure. It is a pressure we always meet on the way of students. Status of students People born today are under pressure on their own shoulders. We no longer have the freedom to have fun like in the past, no longer do the things we love, but instead study and study. Outside of class time, we have to study more subjects, the demands of our parents give us a headache. The most important pressure for students is family pressure, this is always a problem. society from time immemorial. Because every parent wants their child to be a good student, to be at the top of the class, to be proud of everyone around. I am not as good as others because my academic strength can only go there. What better, why won't my parents think for me even for once? Why? I wish that: “I just wish my parents would understand me once, just once”… The pressure of the family is weighing heavily on our little shoulders, we should have had time to play at this age. with friends but all the time I was forced to study and study by family. It is said: "Family is the place that gives us the motivation to live, work and study" but "on the contrary", family now only gives us pressure. Behind the achievements and points of the number that we have achieved, how hard did we have to work every night? Surely every answer is: “No”. Because if they will put themselves in our position for once, they will understand the feeling we are experiencing which is “Study pressure”.

Currently, school violence is not thoroughly controlled, causing many children to fall into a state of panic, fear, and depression because of being bullied or bullied when going to school. Most children will have a fear of wanting the paper to go and try to endure it on their own. In addition, because the parents' subjectivity does not pay attention to their children will also increase this situation. Academic pressure: Children who are under a lot of academic pressure, are set too high by their parents and are influenced by the school will make children more susceptible to depression. Usually, parents always want their children to achieve high, so they take up all of their children's time for learning. This makes the child under a lot of pressure, and at the same time will be self-deprecating, ashamed, and afraid when not achieving the set achievement. Influence from family happiness: Family plays an important role in the development and psychology of young children. Depression in children can stem from unhappy families, frequent quarrels between parents, causing children to suffer a lot of psychological damage.

Dịch :  Hiện nay tình trạng bạo lực học đường không được kiểm soát triệt để khiến cho rất nhiều trẻ em rơi vào trạng thái hoảng loạn, lo sợ, trầm cảm vì bị ức hiếp, bắt nạt khi đi học. Đa phần các trẻ sẽ có tâm lý sợ hãi muốn giấy đi và tự cố gắng chịu đựng. Ngoài ra, vì sự chủ quan không chú ý đến con cái của các bậc phụ huynh cũng sẽ khiến cho tình trạng này càng bị gia tăng. 
Áp lực học tập: Những trẻ em chịu nhiều áp lực học tập, bị cha mẹ đặt mục tiêu quá lớn và những tác động từ phía nhà trường sẽ làm cho trẻ dễ bị trầm cảm hơn. Thông thường, phụ huynh luôn muốn con mình đạt được thành tích cao nên đã chiếm lấy toàn bộ thời gian của bé cho chuyện học hành. Điều này khiến bé chịu nhiều áp lực, đồng thời sẽ bị tự ti, xấu hổ, sợ hãi khi không đạt được thành tích đã đặt ra. 
Ảnh hưởng từ hạnh phúc gia đình: Gia đình có vai trò quan trọng đối với sự phát triển và tâm lý của các trẻ nhỏ. Tình trạng trầm cảm ở trẻ em có thể xuất phát từ việc gia đình không hạnh phúc, cha mẹ thường xuyên cãi vã, khiến bé chịu nhiều tổn thương về tâm lý. 

      Today, there are many types of pressure for children, especially mental pressure. The main cause of this problem is that our society is too developed, parents always put too much ambition on their children. The next reason is that there are children who are going through puberty, their bodies are gradually developing, causing dissimilarities between children and parents, causing quarrels, making children stressed and tired. And especially, parents think that children who argue are lying and disrespectful, I myself have been under pressure of this so I understand very well. The next reason is because now, knowledge is full, homework is too much, seeing that she assigns too many tests, tests, competition for academic achievement puts a lot of pressure on children. The impact of this is huge. There are many children who have committed suicide because of too much pressure, unable to bear it, causing pain to many families. There are also children who follow social evils, have poor academic results, and avoid people. If today's society understands and sympathizes with today's poor children, the problem of pressure in children will soon be prevented. 

mentioned the comparison nên đổi thành mentioned in the comparison nha bạn !

Sai chính tả: barbaricly sửa thành barbarically

Mĩnh nghĩ câu cuối chỉ nên dùng It chứ không dùng In it bạn ạ ?

I myself chẳng có vấn đề gì cả, cụm đấy dùng để nhấn mạnh quan điểm cá nhân or sth like that cũng được mà nhỉ?

In this day and age, youngsters have to be under a large amount of stress. This paragraph is going to portray the reasons and impacts of pressure. In the first place, a lot of factors relating to study put pressure on children. Children tend to study as hard as possible to come up with their parents. The curricula at school are so heavy and focus too much on the academic performances of children. Furthermore, kids must engage in a large number of outside-school lessons, which lessens their relaxing time. In the second place, the consequences of pressure are of great seriousness. Children need to cope with countless assignments and endless classes. They have to endure pressure alone since they do not want to upset their parents. Stress can also spark physical and psychological problems. In conclusion, pressure bears a variety of causes and influences. Hence, it is highly recommended that parents and kids work out ways to tackle stress.

Dòng 3 "come up with" -> "come up to", mình viết lỗi

cái chỗ I myself hình như sai ngữ pháp rồi á:) Cụm There are many children who have hay There are also children who follow bỏ there are hợp lý hơn:v

Em cảm ơn ạ.

Mình cũng giống ý kiến của bạn 🌃💎Pandora là I myself là sai ngữ pháp ròi :D

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